tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4879556472347736809.post6688069711486685744..comments2024-03-13T12:29:29.462-07:00Comments on Aidan Writes: : Dremlen Feygl: Drowsing BirdsAidanFhttp://www.blogger.com/profile/09876041003278004627noreply@blogger.comBlogger9125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4879556472347736809.post-52829742013282042932011-12-07T01:10:54.383-08:002011-12-07T01:10:54.383-08:00Hi there Aidan -- I thought this was fantastically...Hi there Aidan -- I thought this was fantastically well written. It really hang together as an imagined place, with it's own rules (which you're always good at), but it was also strikingly crafted from Sosimo's POV. It really was his tale -- a lovely piece of character writing. <br /><br />You packed a lot of development and motivation into a small space, and to cap it off, it felt like a rounded story. I didn't need any more or less. <br /><br />Eating a flittery bird is also a lasting image. o_O.<br /><br />That was a great early morning read. <br /><br />St.Stephenhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/10111660663883108862noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4879556472347736809.post-85283503987107200142011-10-10T13:06:36.186-07:002011-10-10T13:06:36.186-07:00Really interesting world-building here. I love the...Really interesting world-building here. I love the way you weave fantasy.Icy Sedgwickhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/11501193571425442406noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4879556472347736809.post-2946545091237399312011-10-10T03:47:35.187-07:002011-10-10T03:47:35.187-07:00Such an interesting take on the privileged versus ...Such an interesting take on the privileged versus poor issues facing the world today. I enjoyed how the world you built was easy to read and understand. Some beautiful imagery here, even in the profound sadness of the loss of the daughter. Well done, thank you for sharing it.<br /><br />Take care,<br />JCAnonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4879556472347736809.post-78544659299314592872011-10-09T19:16:25.411-07:002011-10-09T19:16:25.411-07:00Nice work, as John said, the jargon comes fast and...Nice work, as John said, the jargon comes fast and furious at the beginning but by the end it's all understood. To do that in a piece this short is quite an accomplishment. Not to mention how well it rings true with today's society.Larry Kollarhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/08317037795075278427noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4879556472347736809.post-34825018934265168282011-10-09T16:15:47.658-07:002011-10-09T16:15:47.658-07:00This was one cool fantasy piece, and I liked the w...This was one cool fantasy piece, and I liked the way Sosimo considered he wasn't a thief but rather a god. You did a wonderful job of creating a different world.Helenhttp://helen-scribbles.comnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4879556472347736809.post-60329122978152673242011-10-08T07:54:40.776-07:002011-10-08T07:54:40.776-07:00An unusual tale bringing home the unfair differenc...An unusual tale bringing home the unfair differences in the lives of the "Haves" and the "Have-nots"Steve Greenhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/18414279461366098783noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4879556472347736809.post-84712087070548481672011-10-07T23:25:28.437-07:002011-10-07T23:25:28.437-07:00It would be interesting to see Sosimo the next day...It would be interesting to see Sosimo the next day... It strikes me that the dremlen feygl has clouded his pain, where the pain clouded his judgement. What will he feel in the morning, when the enormity of what he has done strikes, with the reality of his own loss?<br /><br />Thought-provoking piece, Aidan, and another fascinating world. =)John Xerohttps://www.blogger.com/profile/17492709629314280633noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4879556472347736809.post-36057757260810958672011-10-07T19:17:41.024-07:002011-10-07T19:17:41.024-07:00It's neat to read Fantasy pieces that throw th...It's neat to read Fantasy pieces that throw their jargon thick upfront, and then unfold and let you understand, with and without exposition for different bits. That's what this does, from its very opening sentence. I had fun passing through this, Aidan. Thank you for sharing.John Wiswellhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/07416044628686736927noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4879556472347736809.post-49204997075285792512011-10-07T19:09:22.043-07:002011-10-07T19:09:22.043-07:00Hope he doesn't get caught for stealing the bi...Hope he doesn't get caught for stealing the bird.Sonia Lalhttp://storytreasury.wordpress.comnoreply@blogger.com