tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4879556472347736809.post8477104783826429090..comments2024-03-13T12:29:29.462-07:00Comments on Aidan Writes: : Ash DanceAidanFhttp://www.blogger.com/profile/09876041003278004627noreply@blogger.comBlogger10125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4879556472347736809.post-73647148276546687312010-08-13T07:04:35.702-07:002010-08-13T07:04:35.702-07:00GP, thank-you.
Deb, I'm glad you liked it. T...GP, thank-you.<br /><br />Deb, I'm glad you liked it. This was a little different stylistically than some of my writing and was amusing to touch on a more YA story than I usually approach. I also slightly modified the prompt, but loved the turn of phrase "twirl a girl" which really led to the dance paragraph description.AidanFhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/09876041003278004627noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4879556472347736809.post-7395705921376018522010-08-12T21:16:43.611-07:002010-08-12T21:16:43.611-07:00Aidan, I so loved this piece. And reading it again...Aidan, I so loved this piece. And reading it again here was even more compelling. I also liked how you incorporated the actual prompt into the middle of the piece instead of at the beginning.Deb Markantonhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/09504649268821803688noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4879556472347736809.post-89697781985405393572010-08-11T07:03:37.416-07:002010-08-11T07:03:37.416-07:00You captured the uncomfortable itch of social expe...You captured the uncomfortable itch of social expectations at odds with personal desires. Well written.Genevieve Jackhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/16178276724159826428noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4879556472347736809.post-3580874666807914952010-08-10T10:01:36.549-07:002010-08-10T10:01:36.549-07:00David, thanks for your comments. Yes, that is a s...David, thanks for your comments. Yes, that is a squirrelly mantra.<br /><br />TS, I'm glad that Jake's conflicted nature came through.AidanFhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/09876041003278004627noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4879556472347736809.post-11378029860259708282010-08-09T13:26:09.260-07:002010-08-09T13:26:09.260-07:00Well done. I really liked how you contrasted Jake&...Well done. I really liked how you contrasted Jake's thoughts on what he should do, against what he actually did.Tessahttps://www.blogger.com/profile/08377570668333453073noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4879556472347736809.post-73316383031099287172010-08-09T08:37:46.517-07:002010-08-09T08:37:46.517-07:00The smartest part of this story for me is how the ...The smartest part of this story for me is how the dance studio mantra "make the girl look good" and its insulting undertone "it doesn't matter how you look" send the not-so-subtle message to a boy in dance class that the ladies are the prize, a message which, for this boy in particular must be bitter news indeed.Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4879556472347736809.post-50508294654754932242010-08-08T21:59:36.236-07:002010-08-08T21:59:36.236-07:00Valerie, J. Dane, Thanks.
Susan, thanks. I misse...Valerie, J. Dane, Thanks.<br /><br />Susan, thanks. I missed the piranha; I'll have to re-read Chieftains. Yes, I enjoy the connections that play out (sometimes coincidentally in this case; and sometimes deliberatively).AidanFhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/09876041003278004627noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4879556472347736809.post-75103069021005108972010-08-08T14:19:05.740-07:002010-08-08T14:19:05.740-07:00A nice, terse bit; loved the implication of confli...A nice, terse bit; loved the implication of conflict throughout. Well done. :)Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4879556472347736809.post-13662476541649909172010-08-08T14:07:58.035-07:002010-08-08T14:07:58.035-07:00So simple but complex. I loved your description of...So simple but complex. I loved your description of the dance. Just before I read yours I read this weeks #Flashfriday by Mazz in Leeds. There was a piranha in hers, too. Funny how we all connect in some way. Give us more, Aidan.Susan Crosshttps://www.blogger.com/profile/05076064230626935030noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4879556472347736809.post-38633586365980234702010-08-08T12:57:43.641-07:002010-08-08T12:57:43.641-07:00Well done, even with a sad ending.Well done, even with a sad ending.Valeriehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/14148970927473800732noreply@blogger.com