tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4879556472347736809.post8676364279211026390..comments2024-03-13T12:29:29.462-07:00Comments on Aidan Writes: : FlamesAidanFhttp://www.blogger.com/profile/09876041003278004627noreply@blogger.comBlogger11125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4879556472347736809.post-19042796710710714472011-10-17T12:40:36.518-07:002011-10-17T12:40:36.518-07:00I like the imagery (ex. "quivering like plum ...I like the imagery (ex. "quivering like plum leaves" and "crying out like the stray dogs"). It helped set the tone of the piece and the Asian feel/scene.<br /><br />I'm curious about their child. Is he/she at home? It almost feels like his wife is still pregnant since he thinks of the child as "the child" instead of a son or daughter.Zaiurehttp://zaiuregrey.comnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4879556472347736809.post-39137629488043052482011-10-16T17:14:53.710-07:002011-10-16T17:14:53.710-07:00Wow - enjoy the mix of old world feel and technolo...Wow - enjoy the mix of old world feel and technology taking place in this piece.Jenny Dreadfulhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/14845702060737687444noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4879556472347736809.post-49971348918022231142011-10-16T12:01:14.070-07:002011-10-16T12:01:14.070-07:00The image of the petal stuck to the blood on the S...The image of the petal stuck to the blood on the SUV was incredibly powerful. I wonder if it was that or the loss of his wife that re-ignited Peifang's flame more?D. Paulhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/00931977627241091039noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4879556472347736809.post-29053496767377339632011-10-16T01:52:43.852-07:002011-10-16T01:52:43.852-07:00Great story Aidan. It has a timeless/placeless fee...Great story Aidan. It has a timeless/placeless feel to it. <br /><br />Things like this happen all around the world far too often.Craig Smithhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/07176851401465801580noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4879556472347736809.post-78099998767508115292011-10-15T16:43:50.238-07:002011-10-15T16:43:50.238-07:00This was a great story. I thought you captured the...This was a great story. I thought you captured the pain anguish and anger of Peifeng in that scene with his dying wife - that was so powerful and that which followed showcased his anger to the full.Helenhttp://helen-scribbles.comnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4879556472347736809.post-10813760554805340352011-10-15T15:54:08.085-07:002011-10-15T15:54:08.085-07:00I wasn't sure of the setting until the SUV cam...I wasn't sure of the setting until the SUV came along, and I knew the outcome wasn't good. You've left enough about the background hazy to make Peifeng's tragedy stand out.Icy Sedgwickhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/11501193571425442406noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4879556472347736809.post-35499159170958524642011-10-14T14:01:48.151-07:002011-10-14T14:01:48.151-07:00That'll give the foreigners something to think...That'll give the foreigners something to think about.<br /><br />A sad story, but one of power and vengeance. You've sketched an interesting world here — and you can always find an SUV around an evil deed, eh?Larry Kollarhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/08317037795075278427noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4879556472347736809.post-48303920163998901762011-10-14T11:34:35.191-07:002011-10-14T11:34:35.191-07:00I didn't even realize they lived in a world wi...I didn't even realize they lived in a world with SUVs until they ran her over. Seems like an awful environment to live in.John Wiswellhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/07416044628686736927noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4879556472347736809.post-18315144867917486522011-10-14T09:14:21.908-07:002011-10-14T09:14:21.908-07:00Powerful writing Aidan, imaginative and visual. ...Powerful writing Aidan, imaginative and visual. Revenge may be a dish best served cold, but the flames will be just as effective.Steve Greenhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/18414279461366098783noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4879556472347736809.post-55365915308276371432011-10-14T09:13:32.037-07:002011-10-14T09:13:32.037-07:00@Sonia, Not any more on purpose than running over ...@Sonia, Not any more on purpose than running over anyone else in the crowd. I may need to rewrite that to make it clear that she was in the wrong place wrong time, but there would be many like her.Anonymoushttps://www.blogger.com/profile/14170148559429001125noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4879556472347736809.post-88803588371388242032011-10-14T08:51:03.035-07:002011-10-14T08:51:03.035-07:00Pretty good story! They ran her over on purpose?Pretty good story! They ran her over on purpose?Sonia Lalhttp://storytreasury.wordpress.comnoreply@blogger.com